The ribbon.With an awkward knot embracing carefree ends.Wound upon itself as a bond of promise.Celebrating an intimate togetherness.Of a length of folded time that touches once disparate lives.Snuggled into a warm rustle and drawn taut as one.
Once again, I agree with Jen. I can only add that you use the feet of both people to tell the story well here. They are so eloquent. She is so free, and he is so tight.
There are lots of stories just by looking at their body languages. The boy is kind of shy because of the way he put his legs, and the girl seems a bit surprised by the boy's kiss that she lifts one of her leg up...This may really be there first kiss! and you reveal just right amount of information that makes viewers keep interested and courious. Very well done!!
Also, I like the way you put them right in the middle, because in this very moment, they two own the world and they are the center of each other's world, nobody else is there...
