I'm sorry Shu, Honorable people can Honorably disagree...but this is vastly the better version...lol. No Question...sorry, the other...is just a bit too creative, maybe even, it's about you and not her....?
Maybe
But sincerely, thanks for showing it to me so I could make up my own mind.
Humm, what was the other edit? I always thought this was exceptional...in content and execution. Shu, you've still got the other edit? I'd be curious...thanks, Traveller